Poem: Aahil Sarfraz

Thursday 25 July 2013

Poem: Aahil Sarfraz

A a cute baby

A a tree of love honors

H houses sing a song

I in tunes from heavens and angels

L love is just at its best with grandparents

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Comments by Helium Members July 2013

Carol Gioia

Helium Moderator

You have the best perspective and such a unique way

of expressing. I guess what I am trying to say is that you

are a cute star right here :)

Ranjana Banerjee

Moeze your temple, shining, Island is superb.

Especially the last lines;

Remember no wars
In this temple

To be
A cute star of heaven

if only we could understand this simple message

we could have made a better heaven right here.
If we could just open our eyes to see the truth

that death rows the boat of life.
Ranjana

Linda Sajiw

Twinkle twinkle
that shining star Moeze
gets us all feeling cuddly cute and cozy
inspiring us all to
follow him in
writing fun poems
and keeping our pens loaded
with messages
for planting seeds to grow love
on Earth.

Love that Shining Temple Island poem!

Thanks Moeze for your inspiration

Kat Apf

Senior Channel Manager

God has designed
One very
Big spiritual temple

It needs
A lot of meditation
And nail biting

I love this! The nail biting is just right!

Always love to read a Moeze poem!

M. L. Kiser

I love the line, "The mantra
Of the eyes"; and doves are one of my

favorite birds. Thanks for the read.

Ranjana Banerjee

The tyres of life
Are not made for that

That is why we puncture flat

Awesome!
Ranjana

Carol Gioia

Helium Moderator

Sandwich, indeed, this is the best of all - love, love it!

Debbee Winegar

This was too cute!!
I loved the lines:

Since when did
He have a girlfriend

I was smiling through the whole thing!! Loved it!!

Ranjana Banerjee

Our sandals of thoughts---- this is brilliant Moeze
Ranjana

Sarah Dean

What bliss to be back on Helium amongst

your razzle dazzle poems! Missed reading

your thread, my cream puff of the day.

Melissa R. Russell

I don't know, sometimes love finds a way

despite the lack of buttons or commonality.

Enjoyed this.

Melissa R. Russell

I loved each and every poem that flowed like

a river from the last I read. We'll never truly

know who reads what we leave behind or

the impressions they took with them...

Still it's nice to know they are read.

Carol Gioia

Helium Moderator

Oh, they are read alright - so much to

absorb and smile, tear up or ponder over.

I said it before, Moeze, you have

the best style. Status is superb!

Ranjana Banerjee

I agree with Carol, you are amazing Moeze.

Your "invisible friend" is awesome,

Sarah Dean

Though we might be invisible friends,

the thread that connects us is strong.

Loved seeing so many new poems from you!

something quite different from what we all wrote.
Ranjana

Nageen .

You truly know an amazing art of writing poetry.

It works as an inspiration for me. Great job,

exeptionally loved and could relate

to the "invisible friends" .
Nageen

Linda Sajiw

Hi Moeze,

Loved them both - glad 2 popped out.

I loved these lines:

"Your whole body
Types out information
For your perception

From this perception
Formalised learning
Is just one cup of tea"

Your poems are always

a joy to read.
Linda

Anthony Tompkins

Hi Moeze,
You have the air of soothsayer about you.

I want to sip some tea and be instructed-

those are very insightful thoughts!

Tony

Ranjana Banerjee

So birds and man

Can eat on one table
Of heaven

Ranjana

Nageen .

Amazing! "You look at England today,

Mr Sun is out, He is pure Sahara royalty,

Red carpets of sweat mate" loved the expression

Nageen

M. L. Kiser

Very good, Moeze. I really love the lines:

He is pure Sahara royalty
Red carpets of sweat mate"

and:

"Royalty under Mr Sun
Don't tell the government
The nurses are being extra kind"

Melissa R. Russell

Great use of imagery here!

Carol Gioia

Helium Moderator

Moeze, you never disappoint -

Mr. Sun is a glorious word painting.

The best lines are in your prompt words poem

Quote

Well I guess the best
Jail is your love

It works in every marriage

So insightful and at the same time subtly humorous!

Comments by Helium Members July 2013

Carol Gioia

Helium Moderator

I love that image, Moeze :)

Elisabeth Mcgrath

NARS Editors

Nice to see you here again Moeze.

I always enjoy your words.

Hope you enjoy the challenge.:-)

Cyn Bagley

Channel Manager

Glad to see you here-- ;-)

M. L. Kiser

I am so soothed by your rain poetry and

I can recall standing out in the rain as a kid,

feeling the cool drops of rain, tapping out

a tune, on my face.

Thanks for the moment, Moeze.

M. L. Kiser

"I i love you
A across the stars in
M mountains of your love"

Very sweet and beautiful; I especially love this line.

Nan Keltie

Channel Manager

"The guitars Of poetry Are soon to sing"
Very nice -- especially since I like the guitar

and poetry sings to our souls!

Sarah Dean

Friends are returning! Great to see you here again

(or perhaps it's me who has been gone).

In any case, happy July Poetry, Moeze!

Frank Maduri

Moeze,
Great job as usual! I really enjoy your style and

innovative perspective. I look forward to reading

Comments from Helium Members re Poetry Month of April in America

Anthony Tompkins

Hi Moeze,
I'm taken by the style your using- I'm not a poetry form scholar,

but is it some kind of particular poetry genre? In any case,

I think the format plays well for your observations-keep up the good work!
Tony

Kat Apf Senior Channel Manager

Hi Moeze,
I have always enjoyed your

unique style of poetry.

Glad you're with us!
:)

C E Goulden

Unique style - introspective as well as prompting a reader to ponder or reflect.

Yes, inspiring and interesting. Write on.

Carol Giola Helium Moderator

Hi there! Your name is Mr. Poet. And you are - in a genre uniquely your own -

you have given us much to think about. Thank you Mr. Poet :)

Frances Smith

More please, that is a lovely way of writing, and it will be interesting

to see how things develop over the 30 days.

Cyn Bagley Channel Manager

Glad to see you here-- Moeze ;-) Thanks for letting me read your poems.

Bob Mundle

Have to agree with all the comments

thus far -

this is an interesting form that you are

using and it is almost childlike in

its simplicity,

but the message inherent in

reading all

three poems is of a good intelligence

and

someone who has taken time

and trouble

to refine the work so that it

reads so easily,

yet leaves the reader thinking

about what

you have written.

Very good, I like these a lot.

Regards, Bob

Elisabeth Mcgrath Nars Editors

I really enjoy the hidden gems (messages?) scattered throughout.

What pleasant, easy reads you present, Moeze.

Carol Giola Helium Moderator

Mr. Plate is the best - an entire history in a handful of words - wonderful!

Kat Apf Senior Channel Manager

My tiger spirit
Goes in the bin
I love these lines, Moeze. This is what I love about your poems.

You know how to make your words interesting and unique.

Write on! Look forward to more!

Gary Maclean

Interesting how all your titles are "Mr" something, yet the Earth is Mrs Earth.

There must be something there to write about?

Kat Apf Senior Channel Manager

Bring your joy
Bring your dance
These lines are really nice. So glad you're here, Moeze!

Carol Giola Helium Moderator

Moeze, I really enjoyed Mr. Rain - "I care about all of you," and

"I don't judge your circumstances" great stuff!

Cyn Bagley Channel Manger

I liked Mr. Rain too-- very happy to see you here Moeze.

You have such happy poems

Carol Giola Helium Moderator

I like Mr. Creator - "a poem cannot describe Him -

He will come for a pulse of faith" - so good!

Kat Apf Senior Channel Manager

As I sit well above you
But I come to earth
I loved these lines! Nice one, Moeze!

M.L.Kiser

A really powerful piece; loved it!

C E Goulden

I do like how you inspire wisdom. Thank you.

Kat Apf Senior Channel Manager

Elisabeth Mcgrath

“Just doing my duty
To be”
What an understated, modest purpose in life,

which you answer so well, Moeze.

Carol Giola Helium Moderator

Ooh, Mr. Zero thanking Mrs. One - my mind wraps itself

around the story I can make of that.
I enjoy all your Mr. poems, and really liked when Mrs. showed up :)

Jay O'Toole

"Hello, Mr. Light. Glad to meet you." ;)
Intriguing poem, Moeze. It makes us think. I like that. :)

Elisabeth Mcgrath NARS Editors

Very apt Moeze. Someone commented on the BBC tonight about the speculation on Prince William’s and Kate’s baby: Time in the womb is the only time and place that this baby will ever have any privacy. I’ll remember your sofa and bed options when the baby is born :-)

C E Goulden

Your writings leave me to ponder...On Baby, now that's a lot of thought put into your writing. I enjoy reading your poetry.

M.L.Kiser

A wondrous description! Love the way that little bundle evolves.

Marl Mckee

Wonderful poetry which I really enjoy!

Jay O'Toole

Funny thoughts, Moeze. ;)

Alexandra Heep Sub Channel Manager

I love Mr. Light! What a unique way you have.

Sarah Dean

Hello Moeze and thanks for the comment you wrote in my thread. I'm so glad you did, because now I have the immense pleasure of reading your poems on this thread. I love your style...the free flow of words, the succinctness, and the way you nail the essence of your topics, through their own voices. Very cool!

Rachelle de Bretagne Community Editorial Manager/Mentor

I like your Mr. Light poem the best of all. It's very sweet and well written.

Rachel.

Kat Apf Senior Channel Manager

Your unusual and unique style shines through, Moeze. Very nice!

T.C Leonard Sub Channel Manager

Great stuff, Moeze. There's always a quotable line and a nice twist at the end. Your poems are never mundane or predictable!

Kat Apf Senior Channel Manager

I feel
The earth is my body
The sun is my universe
The moon is my soul

I like these lines best. Nice work, Moeze, as always!

M.L.Kiser

After all, "We are all one tribe!"

Kat Apf Senior Channel Manager

Is in all
Like beautiful rivers

Just love these lines! :)

Frank Maduri

I really enjoyed reading your words! I particularly like Mr. Zero, Mr. Moon, and Mr. Plate. The style is unique yet it makes me ponder and reflect on so much. Brilliant stuff and thank you for sharing!

Wills Rogers

I haven't read many poems with this tone. I think you have something original here. Your simplistic approach is refreshing.

Elisabeth Mcgrath NARS Editors

My name is Mr Email

My journey
Has been long

From the days
Of the verbal cave

Says it all so succinctly, Moeze. You summarize the progress of millenia in so few words.

Nan Keltie

Moeze - you mentioned to me you use simple words -- and yet you express your thoughts in an amazing style of poetry that gives us pause to consider the messages woven within. Great style!

Carol Giola Helium Moderator

Mr Tomato and Mr Email - gems from Mr. one of a kind Poet :)

Ranjana Banerjee

Shaking all the numbers
Shaping all the numbers

Saying all about the power of zero in so few words :)
Superb!
Ranjana

Rachelle de Bretagne Community Editorial Manager/Mentor

I enjoyed your Mr. Tomato but I liked your email one the best.

Rachel.

Nan Keltie Channel Manager

Moeze - Thanks for writing Mr. Bully -- a powerful message that needs to be shared. In fact, it would make an excellent handout for bully-prevention discussion groups.

Kat Apf Senior Channel Manager

I have eggs of jealousy

I hatch on you

Love these lines! What a unique way to say it! Good one, as always!

Sarah Dean

I'm enjoying your poems so much! You write equally well when the voice is Mr. Bully or Summer. Do you mind if I share some of these with my coaching clients? Part of my work is to invite clients to see things from various perspectives. You do this sooo well! I think this style might be helpful to some of them.

C E Goulden

Moeze - your thinking poem had me thinking --- so much to glean from your poetry...shades of wisdom and certainly inspirational depth. I enjoy reading. Your Mr Poem - pome is write on superb; the flow is like a vision full of senses. Adam's first soul, crying is enlightening and your Bully poem bears such truth. I really admire your style. Offers reflection to a reader.

M.L.Kiser I love "Mr. Summer".

C E Goulden

Moeze all your poems are word worthy bits of wisdom and I especially liked the River poem. Rich connective type stream. I enjoyed that read especially.

Ranjana Banerjee

Master Morning
Master Afternoon
Master Evening
I want more kids
But there is birth control

----------Hilarious you lifted my mood.
I liked the ending too,

He never came to
My wedding
But I like him

Amazing work Moeze !
Ranjana Banerjee

M.L.Kiser

Moeze, it's incredible the way that you take a subject and give it a whole new dimension. "Mrs Ocean of Heaven", is a fabulous piece of description. Thanks for some great reads.

Elisabeth Mcgrath NARS Editors

So much poignancy from Mr. Heater. Painful, true and sad.

Kat Apf Senior Channel Manager

No clothes
On my soul I wear

Liked these lines, Moeze.

:)

Linda Sajlw

Hello Mr. Are you going to do a book titled Mr?

Loved them all- simple and they hit home to key messages quickly.

I especially liked:All the way
From the cushions
Of the heavenly ocean

*****
In our
Planetary orbital genes
*****
The winter swims
Any bones to death

Even many trees
Are humiliated naked

Alexandra Heep Sub Channel Manager

I absolutely love the "Mr." series. How clever.

C E Goulden

Moeze - and on Love - this is a great write on the many fabrics and way we see, wear Love.

M.L.Kiser

Moeze, Great poem and I especially love this line:

"Full of overloaded
Soul complex"

You got the point of that one just right! You really know how to get a subject across on the written page. I will miss the magic of your poetry.

POET - MOEZE. LALJI

Thursday 25 July 2013